A Short Story...}{want criticism

Zayden NOT ASSHOLE SPAM "I'm not mad, I'm insane and I hear voices in my head, but...hey, who doesn't?" -Zayden Posts: 95	A Short Story...}{want criticism Dec 27, 2010 8:23:59 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Zayden on Dec 27, 2010 8:23:59 GMT -5 I love the story nothing wrong with it in my eyes... looks perfect it will cool to see if you make it long
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Kunabee Liger <3 Irwin Posts: 808	A Short Story...}{want criticism Dec 28, 2010 14:47:18 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Kunabee on Dec 28, 2010 14:47:18 GMT -5 I plan to keep it short. But thanks, Zayden